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Claire\'s Homework

작성자: 박*연
2022-02-06 435

회원님의 영작문



Homework: What kind of books do you like reading? What makes it/them interesting?

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for this Claire. Yes, reading has a lot of benefits we can take advantage of. So keep reading!


“Books are the real source of knowledge,” Manya Gupta said. 

>>>  correct 

There is one common feature among many successful people. 

>>>   correct   

Every successful people had a common feature that they read lots of books during their lifetime. 

>>> Every successful person had a common feature of reading lots of books during his/her lifetime.   

Steve Jobs, Bill Gates, President Obama, and many other people who have made great achievements. 

>>> correct     

My favorite kind of books is usually fiction types, which can both be a source for fun and lessons.

>>>  correct    

Let me introduce my favorite book, The Death Poets Society.

>>>  correct    

This book mainly aimed for finding true dreams under the pressure of parents who hope them to enter prestigious universities and live a successful life of parents’ imagination. 

>>>  correct   

>>> OR: This book mainly aimed for finding true dreams under the pressure of parents who hope them to enter prestigious universities and live a successful life as their parents' wish.

But as a new language teacher John Keating came to the school and teach students in an exclusive way of his, students start to spread out their wings of the dream that they truly desired. 

>>> But as a new language teacher John Keating came to the school and taught students in an exclusive way of his, students started to spread out their wings of the dream that they truly desired.   

In the end, a student who couldn’t stand the force of his parents killed himself, and because of that, John Keating leave the school. 

>>> In the end, a student who couldn’t stand the force of his parents killed himself, and because of that, John Keating left the school.   

The end of the story seems like a sad ending, but it’s not. 

>>>  correct 

By the effect of John Keating, the school start to change the way they forced students to learn. 

>>>  correct 

While reading this book, I laughed, smiled, and cried. 

>>> correct  

This book made me feel lots of emotions and gave me a lesson that “We must strive to find our own voice”.

>>>  correct    

Most of the time, I find fiction books interesting in ways that they can be read from different perspectives.

>>>  correct     

Thus, even if I read the same book many times, I find different lessons and my mind is always full of different thoughts and impressions. 

>>>   correct   

In my opinion, this is one of the sources that increase the value of literary works, giving abundant ways of approaching in different viewpoints. 

>>>   correct   

The value of literary works to readers depends on what perspective does reader approaches with. 

>>>  The value of literary works to readers depends on what perspective the reader approaches it.  

For an example of me, my perspective on books changes as I grow. 

>>> OR: In my case, my perspective on books changes as I grow. 

I find this state interesting. 

>>>  correct     

My background knowledge piles up as I grow older and it changes my perspective toward the books. 

>>>   correct    

The lessons and emotions we would find in the books are unlimited. 

>>>  correct     

Also, different from non-fiction books, I can peep into the author’s world. 

>>>   correct    

Harry Potter, a book I also enjoy reading every time I read it, I feel like I am living in the magic world of J.K. Rowling. 

>>>   correct   

>>> OR: Harry Potter, a book I also enjoy reading, made me feel like I was living in the magical world of J.K. Rowling every time I red it. 

Literary works are like an airplane to the author’s wonderland.

>>>  Literary works is like an airplane to the author’s wonderland. 

I believe reading books is a key to success. 

>>>  correct      

Books provide an unlimited source of knowledge, stories, fun, and lessons. 

>>>  correct     

These days, it’s not that easy to find readers compare to the past. 

>>> These days, it’s not that easy to find readers compared to the past.   

In the past, when there were no electronic devices, it was easier to find people reading outside: in the subways, buses, and on the benches. 

>>> correct     

But nowadays as technology develops, most people’s eyes are tied up on their phones. 

>>>  correct     

If we participate at least a moment in books, we would be able to see another world. 

>>> correct     

The more we read, the more we gain.

>>>  correct    

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