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Kindly answer the following in essay form.
What kind of celebration would you like for your birthday?

I just want to eat out with my family and eat my favorite food like beef stake and pasta. And then, I'd like to eat some cake. Also I want to be celebrated from my friends. They always send me some celebrative messages and gifts. Every birthday has been very good for me from first to last.

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Hi Won:)

That sounds like a fun birthday party!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I just want to eat out with my family and eat my favorite food like beef stake and pasta. 
>> CORRECT

And then, I'd like to eat some cake. 
>> CORRECT

Also I want to be celebrated from my friends. 
>> I also want to celebrate with my friends

They always send me some celebrative messages and gifts.
>> CORRECT 

Every birthday has been very good for me from first to last.
>> CORRECT 

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