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What\'s the most memorable vacation you\'ve had?

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The most memorable vacation is 2 days 1 night trip with my family a few years ago
We traveled Busan city, that is far away from my hometown
We started early in the morning at 5 a.m
We made many happy memories in Busan.
We ate various and delicious foods and toured many places
when we went there, sometimes we walked long distance and then we used various public transport like a subway, a taxi, and a double-decker bus

The best thing that we had experienced was to ride a double-decker bus without a roof. we could explore the city on the roofless bus

At that time, my family was very happy

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Hey Elliot!


Thank you so much for taking the time to answer the homework I gave you. This is a very good exercise for you to improve your sentence construction, grammar, and even writing skills. On that note, your sentences were great! You also explained the trip in a way that it was quite easy to imagine. I think lots of people liked traveling around Busan, I guess it is really a go-to-spot for tourists.


Do take note to please use the proper punctuation marks such as periods (.) and commas (,). Also make sure to capitalize the first letter of each new sentence. Capitalization means using the big form of the letter.


Keep it up! I look forward to you answering more homework questions ^^

-Teacher Violet.


The most memorable vacation is 2 days 1 night trip with my family a few years ago.

>> The most memorable vacation as a 2 day and 1 night trip with my family a few years ago.


We traveled Busan city, that is far away from my hometown

>> We traveled around Busan City which is far from my hometown.


We started early in the morning at 5 a.m.

>> CORRECT!


We made many happy memories in Busan.

>> CORRECT!


We ate various and delicious foods and toured many places

when we went there, sometimes we walked long distance and then we used various public transport like a subway, a taxi, and a double-decker bus.

>> We ate various delicious foods and toured many places.

When we got there, sometimes we walked long distances and then we used various public transport like a subway, a taxi, and a double-decker bus.


The best thing that we had experienced was to ride a double-decker bus without a roof. 

>> CORRECT!


we could explore the city on the roofless bus

>> We could explore the city on the roofless bus.


At that time, my family was very happy

>> At that time, my family was very happy.


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