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Q:If you could stop time, what would you do and why?
A:Even if I can stop time, I won't.
Scientifically, it's hard to stop time, and even if I can stopping time is just making a contradiction of universe.
Even if there would be no contradiction, if something changed about me, then other people can see me strange.
And it would be hard to be adapted to other people, and I cannot tell anything happened while the time is stopped.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Even if I can stop time, I won't.

>> CORRECT!
Scientifically, it's hard to stop time, and even if I can stopping time is just making a contradiction of universe.

>> Scientifically, it's hard to stop time and even if I can, stopping time is just making a contradiction in the universe.
Even if there would be no contradiction, if something changed about me, then other people can see me strange.

>> Even if there would be no contradiction, if something changed about me, then other people might see me strangely.
And it would be hard to be adapted to other people, and I cannot tell anything happened while the time is stopped.

>> It would be hard to become adapted to other people, and I cannot say anything happened while the time is stopped.

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