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Why is obesity increasing?

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As the quality of modern lives is improved, people's eating habits are also changed. This is because they seek convenient life due to their busy routines. For instance, people prefer to eat simplify, such as junk food. These foods are lopsided with nutrients. People can buy it easily on the street, and also they don't need to cook long time. Also, the delicious, sharp-taste and cheap price attract the people. However, these foods have plenty of evidence that is proven scientifically. First of all, food has high calories. Fast food use a lot of oil and condiments, and nutrients are not good. Because of instant food's fats, modern people easily can get weight. In addition, people use their own car or public transportation. This circumstance reduces people's physical activities and ruins human body balance. The development of technology increases obesity thesedays. The worker-holic situation makes the trend that people prefer to have simplified instant food that can eat easily and fastly.

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Hello Jin!
Thank you for your ideas.  We really need to be healthy even if we are surrounded by an unhealthy kind of diet.  There are still many ways to maintain good health.  ^^

~T. Maine


As the quality of modern lives is improved, people's eating habits are also changed. 
>>Correct. 
This is because they seek convenient life due to their busy routines. 
>>This is because they seek a convenient life due to their busy routines. 
For instance, people prefer to eat simplify, such as junk food. 
>>For instance, people prefer to eat simply such as junk food. 
These foods are lopsided with nutrients. 
>>Correct. 
People can buy it easily on the street, and also they don't need to cook long time. 
>>People can buy it easily on the street, and they also don't need to cook it for a long time. 
Also, the delicious, sharp-taste and cheap price attract the people.
>>Correct. 
However, these foods have plenty of evidence that is proven scientifically. 
>>Correct. 
First of all, food has high calories. 
>>Correct. 
Fast food use a lot of oil and condiments, and nutrients are not good.
>>Fast food uses a lot of oil, condiments, and other contents which are not good for the health. 
Because of instant food's fats, modern people easily can get weight. 
>>Correct. 
In addition, people use their own car or public transportation. 
>>Correct. 
This circumstance reduces people's physical activities and ruins human body balance. 
>>Correct. 
The development of technology increases obesity thesedays. 
>>The development of technology increases obesity these days. 
The worker-holic situation makes the trend that people prefer to have simplified instant food that can eat easily and fastly.
>>The workaholic situation makes the trend that people prefer to have simplified as instant.

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