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If you can change something about your lifestyle, what would it be and why?

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If I can change something about my lifestyle, than I want to exercise more.
Nowadays, I have to prepare about a lot of exams, and also I have so many things to learn.
Because of these reasons, I have to study a lot.
And because of this, I don't have enough time to exercise a lot.
But I want to make a stronger body, and then I need to exercise a lot.
So I want to make some times that I can exercise freely in my lifestyle.

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Hi John! 

These changes can really change your lifestyle more efficiently. I hope you will be successful in doing so. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

If I can change something about my lifestyle, than I want to exercise more.
>> If I can change something about my lifestyle, it would be exercising more. 

Nowadays, I have to prepare about a lot of exams, and also I have so many things to learn.
>> Nowadays, I have to prepare for a lot of exams, and I have so many things to learn.

Because of these reasons, I have to study a lot.
>> Because of these reasons, I have to study a lot and I have less time to exercise. 

And because of this, I don't have enough time to exercise a lot.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

But I want to make a stronger body, and then I need to exercise a lot.
>> But I want to make my body stronger so I need to exercise a lot.

So I want to make some times that I can exercise freely in my lifestyle.
>> This is why I want to make more time to exercise freely in my lifestyle. 
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