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Do you want a salary increase?

Of course, but it¡¯s a burden to me because I have to pay the salary. I really want to increase the salary for me and my colleagues. This is what every employee wants but employers who have to pay salary may think a little differently. I¡¯m not the owner, I am hired as a representative. So I want to pay a lot to my employees, but it is a burden to me.

In Korea, the minimum wage system is applied. Most workplaces raise wages every year. The annual wage increase rate is decided in consultation with the representatives of employers, workers and mediators. All the time, workers demand more, employers demand less, and mediators coordinate.

I look forward to a society where businesses and workers are happy together.

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Hello Elliot! 

Thank you so much for such a detailed answer. I appreciate your honesty and effort in making great sentences. It was really well said.

I fully understood your point! Looking from the point of view of superiors, it is not that easy to increase your employee's salaries. I do wish other than salaries, employees can get performance incentives and good benefits too.

Your sentences are mostly correct! Very good! Only a few small corrections, like joining 2 sentences into a long one, and adding a comma. Keep it up!

Thank you for your effort!
-Teacher Violet.



Of course, but it¡¯s a burden to me because I have to pay the salary. 
>>CORRECT!

I really want to increase the salary for me and my colleagues. 
>>CORRECT!

This is what every employee wants but employers who have to pay salary may think a little differently. 
>>CORRECT!

I¡¯m not the owner, I am hired as a representative. So I want to pay a lot to my employees, but it is a burden to me.
>> I¡¯m not the owner, I am hired as a representative, so I want to pay a lot to my employees, but it is a burden to me.

In Korea, the minimum wage system is applied. 
>>CORRECT!

Most workplaces raise wages every year. 
>>CORRECT!

The annual wage increase rate is decided in consultation with the representatives of employers, workers and mediators. 
>> The annual wage increase rate is decided in consultation with the representatives of employers, workers, and mediators. 

All the time, workers demand more, employers demand less, and mediators coordinate.
>>CORRECT!

I look forward to a society where businesses and workers are happy together.
>>CORRECT!

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