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What are your feelings about shopping? Is it a pleasure or torture?

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Shopping is a pleasure for me.
Actually, one of my hobbies is going shopping with friends or family.
I like shopping because the clothes people are wearing can express themselves.
We can speculate on one's personality if we look at their style.
Some people who are always wearing colorful clothes might have an outgoing personality.
On the other hand, some people who are always wearing pastel color's clothes might calm people.
Sometimes, clothes can express our mood.
When I feel down, I usually wear a black piece of clothes.
I think the reason we wear black clothes at a funeral is quite similar to the upper reason.
But, if we feel happy, we usually wear bright color's clothes such as wedding anniversary and
our birthdays.
I think if I have many clothes, I expose myself better to other people.
For these reasons, I like to go shopping.

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I enjoyed reading this, Jiwon. Thank you for your expressing yourself extensively in writing as well :) I can relate to most of what you said and I'm glad to know you take pleasure in shopping. Enjoy your weekend and have fun! ~Jane ^___^


Shopping is a pleasure for me. 
>> CORRECT =) 

Actually, one of my hobbies is going shopping with friends or family. 
>> CORRECT =) 

I like shopping because the clothes people are wearing can express themselves. 
>> CORRECT =) 
OR >> I like shopping because people can express themselves through the clothes they wear. 

We can speculate on one's personality if we look at their style. 
>> CORRECT =) 

Some people who are always wearing colorful clothes might have an outgoing personality. 
>> CORRECT =) 

On the other hand, some people who are always wearing pastel color's clothes might calm people.
OR >> On the other hand, some people who are always wearing pastel-colored clothes might calm people.

Sometimes, clothes can express our mood. 
>> CORRECT =)  

When I feel down, I usually wear a black piece of clothes. 
>> When I feel down, I usually wear a black piece of clothing. 

I think the reason we wear black clothes at a funeral is quite similar to the upper reason.
>> CORRECT =) 
OR >> I think the reason we wear black clothes at a funeral is quite similar to the reason stated above.

But, if we feel happy, we usually wear bright color's clothes such as wedding anniversary and our birthdays. 
>> But if we feel happy, we usually wear bright-colored clothes on wedding anniversaries and our birthdays. 

I think if I have many clothes, I expose myself better to other people. 
>> CORRECT =)
OR >> I think if I have a lot of clothes to choose from, I can express myself better to other people. 

For these reasons, I like to go shopping. 
>> CORRECT =) 

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