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HOMEWORK:
How can you influence others to have the same interest as you? Answer in a few sentences.

The first, I talk about why these intersts are good and show them the outcome.

If others have the same interest as me, I would be happy. But I am not willing to push these intersts to do because everyone's interest is different.

Have a happy weekend Donna!

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Hello there, Hae Ju!

The best way to influence others is to enjoy and be successful with the interest of hobby that we have. You are absolutely right however about not puching somthing for them to do. If we push others to be interested, that is not interest anymore but task.

Please go over my sentence suggestions below. Thank you for your brillinat ideas here on your homework answer. Excellent composition!

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

The first, I talk about why these intersts are good and show them the outcome.
>> At first, I will talk  about why these intersts are good and show them the outcome.

If others have the same interest as me, I would be happy. 
>> Correct!

But I am not willing to push these intersts to do because everyone's interest is different.
>> But I am not willing to push these intersts for them to do because everyone's interest is different.

Have a happy weekend Donna!
>> Correct!
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