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Hello, T.Donna.
How was your day?
I had so busy Monday, as always.
Fortunately, there was a foreigner who spoke English well.
He was from Uzbec, as many patients of mine.
He had a fungal infection on his thigh, so I explained to him about his disease, treatment, and progress fluently.
Because I was so tired, I almost mumbled.
He understood my words, though.
He told me that it was so good for him to meet a doctor who can speak English.
I assumed that he met some doctors who couldn't speak English before.
Dr.MJ worried that most of our patients and clients would not com to us in new clinic.
However, I don't have any concerns about it.
I just feel tired with our large amount of works.
Around 6 years ago, I built the current clinic alone.
And I think that I made a good clinic by now.
This clinic is my first step, and gave me a lot of memories.
But, to be honest, I am looking forward to my new clinic very well.
To work harder with my best tomorrow, I will get sleep early.
See you soon.

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Hi! Good day, Dr. Kim!

I had a very goo day yesterday, thank you very much for asking.  As for you, Mondays set the tone and mood for the entire week. You would better be very well rested and on the go all the time. 

You had another Uzbek patient. I guess, your former patients or clients referred you to him. It is a great opportunity to practice your profession and English skills. By now, you are a certified international doctor! I wish you more foreign clients not only for diseases but also for their aesthetic treatments. Stay innovative, kind, and accommodating, you are doing an outstanding job. Dr. MJ need no to worry about your clients since your quality of work always speaks for itself. You have established your clinic as a leading reliable beauty and skin care institute. 

Congratulations for composing almost all of your sentences correctly! If you read your homework for about three times, I am sure, you can edit your own mistakes and eventually get all of your sentences perfectly for the next coming months. As always, thank you for your hard work, dedication, and talent.

See you!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

I had so busy Monday, as always.
>> I had a busy Monday, as always.

Fortunately, there was a foreigner who spoke English well.
>> Correct!

He was from Uzbec, as many patients of mine.
>> He was from Uzbekistan, as many patients of mine.

He had a fungal infection on his thigh, so I explained to him about his disease, treatment, and progress fluently.
>> Correct!

Because I was so tired, I almost mumbled.
>> Correct!

He understood my words, though.
>> Correct!

He told me that it was so good for him to meet a doctor who can speak English.
>> Correct! 

I assumed that he met some doctors who couldn't speak English before.
>> Correct!

Dr.MJ worried that most of our patients and clients would not com to us in new clinic.
>> Correct!
Or: come

However, I don't have any concerns about it.
>> Correct!

I just feel tired with our large amount of works.
>> I just feel tired with our large amount of work.

Around 6 years ago, I built the current clinic alone.
>> Correct!

And I think that I made a good clinic by now.
>> Correct! 
Or: Remove 'And'.

This clinic is my first step, and gave me a lot of memories.
>> Correct!
Or: Remove the comma.

But, to be honest, I am looking forward to my new clinic very well.
>> Correct! Very good use of commas! 

To work harder with my best tomorrow, I will get sleep early.
>> Correct!

See you soon.
>> Correct!
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