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Writing Exercise: How are hobbies now different from hobbies in the past? Explain.


Today's hobbies is almost use smart phone. But hobbies in the past don't have smart phone so play with nature.
So the conclusion is hobbies in the past more good

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Hi Justin!
Take note of the new expressions mentioned below.
They would be helpful for you in trying to make sentences.
Be careful of your conjunctions as well.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Today's hobbies is almost use smart phone. 
>> The hobbies nowadays are mostly about the use of a smart phone. 
But hobbies in the past don't have smart phone so play with nature.
>> However, hobbies in the past involved enjoying nature. 
So the conclusion is hobbies in the past more good
>> So, in conclusion, hobbies in the past were better. 
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