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Good day, Mark! It's good to know that you know how to handle yourself in order to stay fit and young. Regular exercise is the best way to do it. We will talk more about this in class. I will see you. Take care always!~ T. Lyn
In my case, i constantly exercise every day. 
>>In my case, I exercise regularly.
And i put on face cream to help keep my face from having wrinkle. 
>>And I am putting on face cream to keep my face from getting wrinkles.
At the most important way, we have to pay attention to outfit and smells.
>>Most importantly, I pay attention to the way I dress and smell.
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