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There's a difference between being slender and healthy because being slim doesn't mean it's healthy. Sometimes being slim is rather bad.

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Great observation, Eric! You correctly pointed out the distinction between being slender and being healthy. It's important to emphasize that health goes beyond appearance, and your understanding of this concept is spot on.  Keep up the thoughtful insights! 
~T.Harmony <3

There's a difference between being slender and healthy because being slim doesn't mean it's healthy. 
>> CORRECT!

Sometimes being slim is rather bad.
>> CORRECT!
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