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What are the challenges you¡¯ve faced in helping your son purse their deam?

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Hello Elly
I wrote my essay as homwork.
Please check the attatched picture.
I always thanks for your help.
See you todays class.
☺️

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Hi Stella,
Thank you for taking the time to answer this question. I really appreciate it. 
You are always welcome. I would love to help you in any way I can. :)
In relation to your essay, I think it is really difficult to support your son while worrying about his future.
At the end of the day, you just want the best for him. You are a good mother! :)
- Teacher Elly~


It is too hard for me to support his dream totally. 
>> CORRECT
OR >> I find it too difficult to fully support his dream.

Because I also wish he has stable job. But, It might not equal with his dream. 
>> Because I also wish that he will have a stable job, but it might not be his dream. 

I face this situation now. 
>> I am facing this situation now. 

He wants to learn soccer. I can support him. 
>> CORRECT
OR >> He wants to learn and play soccer, then I can support him on this. 

But, as I said before paragraph, I hope his stable life. 
>> But, as I said on the previous sentence, I wish him a stable life. 
OR >> Like what I have said on the previous sentence, I hope he will have a stable life.

If he just wants more learning it, then It is okay to me. 
>> If he wants to learn more about it, then it is okay to me. 
OR >> If he wants to learn more about it, that is fine with me.

However, If he belive that he could become a soccer player, then I couldn't support him anymore. Because I have to consider in our future. 
>> However, if he believes that he could become a soccer player in the future, then I can't support him anymore because I have to consider his future. 

However I know that I might be wrong in this. 
>> Anyway, I know that I might be wrong about this. 
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