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Q : Which Asian country do you think has the most interesting culture?

A : In my opinion, the country which has the most interesting culture is Korea.
Maybe, it can be affected that i don`t know culture of other Asian countries well.
Korea has been well-known by K-POP and K-DRAMA etc..
In case of K-POP, Korean idol singers have a lot of fans all over the world.
For seeing them, many foreigners are visiting Korea.
Also, although you and i don`t like "Squid Game", it is very popular.
And we also have delicious foods, webtoons, beautiful touring spots.
So i think Korea has the most interesting culture.

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Hello Eddy!
Thank you for your thoughtful response! You shared great examples to support your opinion. Just a quick tip: watch for sentence structure and article use (like ¡°the culture¡± vs. ¡°culture¡±) and try to avoid using ¡°etc.¡± in formal writing—list a few clear examples instead. You're doing well—keep it up!
~~Teacher Kate 

In my opinion, the country which has the most interesting culture is Korea.
>>CORRECT!
>>OR: In my opinion, the country with the most interesting culture is Korea.
Maybe, it can be affected that i don`t know culture of other Asian countries well.
>>Maybe this is because I don¡¯t know the cultures of other Asian countries very well.
Korea has been well-known by K-POP and K-DRAMA etc.
>>Korea has become well-known through K-pop, K-dramas, etc.
In case of K-POP, Korean idol singers have a lot of fans all over the world.
>>In the case of K-pop, Korean idol singers have many fans all over the world.
For seeing them, many foreigners are visiting Korea.
>>To see them, many foreigners visit Korea.
Also, although you and I don`t like "Squid Game", it is very popular.
>>CORRECT!
And we also have delicious foods, webtoons, beautiful touring spots.
>>CORRECT!
So, I think Korea has the most interesting culture.
>>CORRECT!
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