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Do you think counting calories is an effective way to maintain a healthy diet?

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whether Counting calories helps a healthy diet or not is a quite controversial topic.
I guess calculating calories is just one of the ways of loosing weight, so actually it's no connection of healthy diet.
The most important thing for diet is to meet balance of nutrition, and counting calories causes eating disorder or exploring appetite.
When I was little, I also experienced eating disorder because of managing calories. So, Properly managing calories helps a healthy diet, but tight calculating calories every time you eat is very harmful.

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Hi Jay,
Thank you for taking the time to answer this essay.
I didn't know that you had an eating disorder when you were little. I hope you have fully recovered from it. 
I agree with you, focusing on a well balanced diet is way better than counting calories. :)
- Teacher Elly~


whether Counting calories helps a healthy diet or not is a quite controversial topic.
>> Whether counting calories helps a healthy diet or not is quite a controversial topic.

I guess calculating calories is just one of the ways of loosing weight, so actually it's no connection of healthy diet.
>> I guess calculating calories is just one of the ways of losing weight, so actually, it has no connection to a healthy diet.
OR >> I guess calculating calories is just one of the ways of losing weight, so actually there's no connection to a healthy diet.

The most important thing for diet is to meet balance of nutrition, and counting calories causes eating disorder or exploring appetite.
>> The most important thing for a diet is to maintain a balance of nutrition, and counting calories can cause eating disorders or disrupt appetite.
OR >> The most important aspect of a healthy diet is achieving a balance of nutrition, while counting calories can lead to eating disorders or disrupt appetite.

When I was little, I also experienced eating disorder because of managing calories. 
>> When I was little, I also experienced an eating disorder because of managing calories.
 
So, Properly managing calories helps a healthy diet, but tight calculating calories every time you eat is very harmful.
>> So, properly managing calories helps maintain a healthy diet, but strictly calculating calories every time you eat is very harmful.
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