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Do you enjoy socializing with others? Why or why not?

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I enjoy socializing with other people.
First of all, I'm an extrovert, so I like to meet other people. And I like to talk to them.
Because the more I meet people, the more I can gain knowledge if I see it with a small effect, and if you see it with a big effect, my social skills increase, and I think there are many things I can gain on my own, such as conversation skills.
But sometimes I want to be alone, so I don't enjoy socializing with other people and spend time alone in a quiet place.

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Hello! 

Thank you for sending your answer to me. 
You also did really well in making your essay. ^^
It's nice to know that you love socializing with others. 
We totally learn a lot from doing so. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



I enjoy socializing with other people.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I enjoy being around people.
>> Or: I like interacting with others.

First of all, I'm an extrovert, so I like to meet other people. And I like to talk to them.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: First of all, I¡¯m an extrovert, so I enjoy meeting and talking to new people.
>> Or: Since I¡¯m outgoing, I like meeting people and having conversations.

Because the more I meet people, the more I can gain knowledge if I see it with a small effect, and if you see it with a big effect, my social skills increase, and I think there are many things I can gain on my own, such as conversation skills.
>> The more people I meet, the more knowledge I gain, even in small ways. On a larger scale, it helps improve my social skills, like communication and conversation.
>> Or: Both in small and big ways, socializing helps me grow personally and socially.

But sometimes I want to be alone, so I don't enjoy socializing with other people and spend time alone in a quiet place.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: However, sometimes I prefer to be alone and spend time in a quiet place instead of socializing.
>> Or: Even though I¡¯m outgoing, I occasionally enjoy being by myself in a peaceful setting.
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