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Why is overindulging in food not good?

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Overindulging in food is bad because it would make people unhealthy.
If we get over indulged into a foods, we will eat more than we should. Eating right amount is very important because if it goes over your amount, then it would cause stomachache and you would feel dullness. Also, you would not feel guilty about what you¡¯re eating so you might eat food that are unhealthy. If you get overindulged in food, you would eat fritters which is very oily
In conclusion, enjoying a food is good, but you should not be overindulged and try to eat healthy food during your meal.

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Overindulging in food is bad because it would make people unhealthy.
>>> correct  
If we get over indulged into a foods, we will eat more than we should. 
>>>  If we indulged into foods, we will eat more than we should.  
Eating right amount is very important because if it goes over your amount, then it would cause stomachache and you would feel dullness. 
>>>  Eating the right amount is very important because if it goes over your required amount, then it would cause stomachache and you would feel dullness.  
Also, you would not feel guilty about what you¡¯re eating so you might eat food that are unhealthy. 
>>>  correct    
If you get overindulged in food, you would eat fritters which is very oily
>>>  If you overindulge in food, you would eat fritters which are very oily/greasy.
In conclusion, enjoying a food is good, but you should not be overindulged and try to eat healthy food during your meal.
>>>  In conclusion, enjoying food is good, but you should not be overindulged and try to eat healthy food during your meal. 
>>>  OR: In conclusion, enjoying food is good, but you should not overindulge and try to eat healthy food during your meal. 
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