¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Why is overindulging in food not good?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*Áø
2025-06-13 267

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Overindulging in food is bad because it would make people unhealthy.
If we get over indulged into a foods, we will eat more than we should. Eating right amount is very important because if it goes over your amount, then it would cause stomachache and you would feel dullness. Also, you would not feel guilty about what you¡¯re eating so you might eat food that are unhealthy. If you get overindulged in food, you would eat fritters which is very oily
In conclusion, enjoying a food is good, but you should not be overindulged and try to eat healthy food during your meal.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Thank you once again for this Eugene. Enjoy your weekend!

Overindulging in food is bad because it would make people unhealthy.
>>> correct  
If we get over indulged into a foods, we will eat more than we should. 
>>>  If we indulged into foods, we will eat more than we should.  
Eating right amount is very important because if it goes over your amount, then it would cause stomachache and you would feel dullness. 
>>>  Eating the right amount is very important because if it goes over your required amount, then it would cause stomachache and you would feel dullness.  
Also, you would not feel guilty about what you¡¯re eating so you might eat food that are unhealthy. 
>>>  correct    
If you get overindulged in food, you would eat fritters which is very oily
>>>  If you overindulge in food, you would eat fritters which are very oily/greasy.
In conclusion, enjoying a food is good, but you should not be overindulged and try to eat healthy food during your meal.
>>>  In conclusion, enjoying food is good, but you should not be overindulged and try to eat healthy food during your meal. 
>>>  OR: In conclusion, enjoying food is good, but you should not overindulge and try to eat healthy food during your meal. 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
143872 What products does your country export the most, and what new... ±Ç*Áø ¿Ï·á 2025-04-29 1
143871 What¡¯s your favorite season of the year? ¿©*Âù ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 0
143870 Do you think remote working will be more common in the future? ½Å*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 899
143869 If you could learn something new (anything), what would it be... ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 864
143868 What are the current national issues that the next president... ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 890
143867 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 3
143866 homework ½Å*¶ó ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 821
143865 Homework for today ¾ö*¸° ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 0
143864 Despite the side effects that come with it, is this weight-loss... ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 727
143863 Is giving up some privacy the price we pay for convenience? ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 1121
143862 How do you show your appreciation to someone who does his/her... ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 1
143861 Pencil is important to everyone. À¯*ºó ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 735
143860 Do you think remote working will be more common in the future? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 854
143859 How do you usually feel when a coworker invites you to meet up... À±*ÀÎ ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 1
143858 homework ÀÌ*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 728
143857 2025.04.25 homework! ÀÌ*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 1060
143856 0425 IELTS writing Task2 homework ¼Û*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 0
143855 2025.04.24 homework! ÀÌ*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 758
143854 Homework ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 721
143853 ¤Ó Á¶*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2025-04-28 918

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04