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Why is it important for children to spend time with adults? Explain

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It is important for children to spend time with adults. To begin with, children need to be guided and protected by adults through education and care. Their age is still too young to spend a lot of time on their own. If they spend time alone, there could be some problems such as safety hazards or unexpected situations. Hence, there is no doubt that adults should be involved in children's activities with appropriate supervision. Moreover, spending time with adults can have a positive impact on children's emotional stability and growth. Some people argue that children can build their independence when they are alone. However, in my opinion, developing independence comes after children first feel safe and emotionally secure. Indeed, children who spend a lot of time with their parents tend to feel more loved and confident. Lastly, adults can help children enhance their intellectual development. By discussing more advanced topics, adults can offer new insights and encourage deeper thinking.

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Hi Isaac!
Those are really good opinions you expressed. 
The statements you chose were simple and clear.
This is the kind of work I expect from you.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
It is important for children to spend time with adults. 
>> Correct
To begin with, children need to be guided and protected by adults through education and care. 
>> Correct
Their age is still too young to spend a lot of time on their own. 
>> They are still too young to spend a lot of time on their own. 
If they spend time alone, there could be some problems such as safety hazards or unexpected situations. 
>> Correct
Hence, there is no doubt that adults should be involved in children's activities with appropriate supervision. 
>> Correct
Moreover, spending time with adults can have a positive impact on children's emotional stability and growth. 
>> Correct
Some people argue that children can build their independence when they are alone.
>> Correct
However, in my opinion, developing independence comes after children first feel safe and emotionally secure. 
>> However, in my opinion, developing independence comes after children feeling safe and emotionally secure. 
Indeed, children who spend a lot of time with their parents tend to feel more loved and confident.
>> Correct
Lastly, adults can help children enhance their intellectual development. 
>> Correct
By discussing more advanced topics, adults can offer new insights and encourage deeper thinking.
>> Correct
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