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Effects of sns on Korean teens

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Like any students in other parts, Korean teens are affected by social networks on Internet. Some stay up late watching clips or chatting with their friends. Of course, some teens try to avoid being disturbed by their smartphones for the school work. Instead of watching or posting something on Instagram, they play soccer or games with their friends. Actually, most of my students belong to the latter. Though, a few teens of Korea are still susceptible to sns. We can see FOMO phenomenon among them.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
I think social networking sites are actually okay since they allow people to socialize. But nowadays, the problem is that they cause a lot of social pressure by showing standards that people feel they should meet. Guidance from people around us is really important so we can distinguish and choose how to use social media properly.
- T. Caitlyn
Like any students in other parts, Korean teens are affected by social networks on Internet. 
>> Like students in other parts of the world, Korean teens are affected by social networks on the Internet.
Some stay up late watching clips or chatting with their friends. 
>> CORRECT.
Of course, some teens try to avoid being disturbed by their smartphones for the school work. 
>> Of course, some teens try to avoid being disturbed by their smartphones while doing schoolwork.
Instead of watching or posting something on Instagram, they play soccer or games with their friends. 
>> Instead of watching or posting on Instagram, they play soccer or games with their friends.
Actually, most of my students belong to the latter. 
>> CORRECT.
Though, a few teens of Korea are still susceptible to sns. 
>> However, a few Korean teens are still susceptible to social networks (SNS).
We can see FOMO phenomenon among them.
>> We can see the FOMO phenomenon among them.
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