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Raising kids independently might have advantage when they are grown up, but it also can give negative effects.
First, advantages are kids will have more skill they can do by their self also they will be independent and able to work alone. But, the negative effects are childhood is the most time they can spend with family. So child might grownup with loneliness. And the children wouldn¡¯t have deep relationship with their parents . Also lack of social skills. This problem is case by case and I think children depends on parents in childhood is better.

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Thank you for this Eugene!

Raising kids independently might have advantage when they are grown up, but it also can give negative effects.
>>  Raising kids independently might have advantages when they are grown up, but it also can have negative effects.
First, advantages are kids will have more skill they can do by their self also they will be independent and able to work alone. 
>>  The first advantage is that kids will have more skills they can do by themselves. Also, they will be independent and able to work alone. 
But, the negative effects are childhood is the most time they can spend with family. 
>>  But, the negative effect is childhood is the time they can spend more time with family. 
So child might grownup with loneliness. 
>> So the child might grow up with loneliness.  
>> OR: So the child might grow up feeling lonely.
And the children wouldn¡¯t have deep relationship with their parents . Also lack of social skills. 
>>  OR: In addition, the children wouldn¡¯t have a deep relationship with their parents, and could also lack  
This problem is case by case and I think children depends on parents in childhood is better.
>>   This is a case-by-case problem, and I think that children depending on their parents in childhood is better.
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