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Area is related to study for children

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I think it is related to study for children Because many education academics are located around in city. Many academis are part of school curriculum that help students to exam .citypreson can become systemtic way to study .
While the countryside less academy and student, so they pursue creative study , not standard class . becase goverment care of school'class as variously active in countryside
I am sure that children are affect to study environment in area

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I think it is related to study for children Because many education academics are located around in city. 
REVISED: I think it is related to children's education because many academic institutions are located in the city.
Many academis are part of school curriculum that help students to exam .citypreson can become systemtic way to study .
REVISED: Many of these academies are part of the school curriculum and help students prepare for exams.
While the countryside less academy and student, so they pursue creative study , not standard class . becase goverment care of school'class as variously active in countryside
REVISED: But in the countryside, there are fewer academies and students. So, children there often learn in a more creative way, not just from textbooks. The government also helps country schools by giving them different fun and active programs.
I am sure that children are affect to study environment in area
REVISED: I believe that a child's study environment is strongly influenced by the area in which they live.
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