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In what ways have people\'s eating habits changed over the years?

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People¡¯s eating habits have changed in many ways over the years.

For example, some people eat less than they used to in order to lose weight.

Others They can eat more vegetables to save healthy.

Also, some people cook at home without eating outside to save money.

There are many ways people's eating habits have changed over the years.


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                    In what ways have people's eating habits changed over the years?


People¡¯s eating habits have changed in many ways over the years.
>>> OR: Over time, the eating habits of different cultures have transformed significantly. 

For example, some people eat less than they used to in order to lose weight. Others They can eat more vegetables to save healthy.
>>> Some people, for instance, eat less than they once did in an effort to shed pounds. Others, on the other hand, eat more vegetables to stay healthy.

Also, some people cook at home without eating outside to save money.
>>> Also, some people avoid eating out and cook at home to save money.

There are many ways people's eating habits have changed over the years.
>>> There are many ways in which people's eating habits have changed over the years.


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