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Question: Do you agree with the idea that everyone ¡°boils¡± at a different degree? Why or why not? Discuss in 3 to 5 sentences.

Answer: The degree of anger is different. Because people has a different personality. So when people get angry, we can be scared, but we may not be scared.

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Hey there, Belle. I appreciate you checking on the homework topic. You're showing effort in your writing, which is important. You write with good structure and few basic grammar mistakes. Keep practicing verb tenses, especially past and future forms -- small mistakes can change the meaning. Enjoy your weekend and see you next week! ~Teacher Jane c",)


The degree of anger is different. 
>> CORRECT 
>> OR: The degree of anger is different for each person. 

Because people has a different personality. 
>> Because people have different personalities. 

So when people get angry, we can be scared, but we may not be scared.
>> So when people get angry, we can be scared, but we shouldn't be. 

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