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Q) Did you enjoy going to academies when you were a student?
A) No. I didn't like going to the academy because it was only for studying to get into university. I didn't want to go every day, it was boring. As you know, Korean parents have a very high desire for their children's education.

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Hello Mr. Park, your response is clear and gives a good explanation of your feelings and reasoning. I made one small adjustment to connect your ideas more smoothly in the second sentence. Keep writing with this level of detail. It makes your answers interesting and easy to follow.

~ T. Lia

No.
>> CORRECT

I didn't like going to the academy because it was only for studying to get into university.
>> CORRECT

I didn't want to go every day, it was boring.
>> I didn't want to go every day because it was boring.

As you know, Korean parents have a very high desire for their children's education.
>> CORRECT
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