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What type of business do you think should be pet-friendly? why?

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I think most type of business will be changed to be pet-friendly.
As you know , these days , many people consist pets on their member of family.
So, like my case, we want to go trip with our pets and then we have to consider all of things about pet in our trips.
Above all, I think the most important thing is having lunch or dinner outside.
Even though It is possible, our pets must stay in the cage when we have dishes.
I know that all pets are not kind and also their owner are polite.
However, our awareness need to evolve in all type of business.

Hello Elly.
I can finish my essay because I wasn't busy.
Finally, It's Thursday,I've been looking for, today.
I'm happy because I'll get holiday tomorrow ,as you know.
See you in our class at night.
Thank you.

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Hi Stella,
I¡¯m really looking forward to seeing more and more establishments become pet-friendly. 
I think it¡¯s going to make the city an even lovelier place for both people and their pets! 
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and respond to my essay. See you in a bit.~^^
- Teacher Elly~


I think most type of business will be changed to be pet-friendly.
>> I think most types of businesses will become pet-friendly.
OR >> I believe most types of businesses will turn pet-friendly in the future.

As you know , these days , many people consist pets on their member of family.
>> As you know, these days, many people consider their pets as members of the family.
OR >> Nowadays, as you know, many people see their pets as family members.

So, like my case, we want to go trip with our pets and then we have to consider all of things about pet in our trips.
>> So, in my case, we want to take trips with our pets, and we have to consider everything about them when we travel.
OR >> For example, in my case, we like to travel with our pets, so we have to plan everything for them.

Above all, I think the most important thing is having lunch or dinner outside.
>> Above all, I think the most important thing is being able to have lunch or dinner outside.
OR >> Above all, the most important thing is dining outside.

Even though It is possible, our pets must stay in the cage when we have dishes.
>> Even though it¡¯s possible, our pets must stay in their cages while we eat.
OR >> Even if it¡¯s allowed, our pets have to stay in their cages during meals.

I know that all pets are not kind and also their owner are polite.
>> I know that not all pets are friendly, and not all owners are polite.
OR >> I understand that some pets aren¡¯t friendly, and some owners aren¡¯t polite.

However, our awareness need to evolve in all type of business.
>> However, our awareness needs to evolve in all types of business.
OR >> However, we need to raise awareness across all types of businesses.

Hello Elly.
>> CORRECT

I can finish my essay because I wasn't busy.
>> I was able to finish my essay because I wasn¡¯t busy.

Finally, It's Thursday, I've been looking for, today.
>> Finally, it¡¯s the Thursday I¡¯ve been looking forward to.

I'm happy because I'll get holiday tomorrow ,as you know.
>> I¡¯m happy because I have a holiday tomorrow, as you know.

See you in our class at night.
>> See you in class tonight.
OR >> 
See you in our class later.

Thank you.
>> CORRECT
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