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Dear John

I am one of the staff, who works in the department of advertisement. I¡¯m writing to ask for your help in arrange about my business trip for 6month

First of all , I would like to explain why I want to our company¡¯s Head office,
I have worked for 5years since I joined our company. these days, sometimes I felt that I want to experience and work in other country So that I can improve what I have skill
And then, one day, I read a company¡¯s news about recruiting to staff , who wants to work in head office in another country. I think it is great opportunity for me.

I know you would be worried about what we proceeded with . Of course I have already done what I was doing, and my colleague who worked with me will proceed with the project.

Therefore, I would be grateful If you help me to arrange about my business trip.
There is no big thing to do, You can just confirm my business trip.

If you have any further question, please don¡¯t hesitate call me.
I very much look forward your pr

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Hello Lee!

You have understood well the requirements of the IELTS writing task and drafted the letter well.

However, the letter is unfinished due to word limit here on the composition site. Would you send it to me on Skype at the chat box so I can complete checking it?

Anyway, well done with your answer.

See you soon in  class

-T. Donna =)

P.S. I got your message and have completed the rest of this activity. Thank you.

Dear John
>> Correct! 
Or: Dear John,

I am one of the staff, who works in the department of advertisement. I¡¯m writing to ask for your help in arrange about my business trip for 6month
>> I am one of the staff, who works in the department of advertisement. I¡¯m writing to ask for your help in arranging my business trip for 6 months. 

First of all , I would like to explain why I want to our company¡¯s Head office,
I have worked for 5years since I joined our company. these days, sometimes I felt that I want to experience and work in other country So that I can improve what I have skill
And then, one day, I read a company¡¯s news about recruiting to staff , who wants to work in head office in another country. I think it is great opportunity for me.
>> First of all , I would like to explain why I want to work at our company¡¯s Head Office.
I have worked here for 5 years since I joined this company. These days, sometimes I feel that I want to experience and work in another country so that I can improve the skills that I have.
And then, one day, I read a company¡¯s news about recruiting staff who want to work in the head office in another country. I thought it was a great opportunity for me.


I know you would be worried about what we proceeded with . Of course I have already done what I was doing, and my colleague who worked with me will proceed with the project.
>> Correct!

Therefore, I would be grateful If you help me to arrange about my business trip.
There is no big thing to do, You can just confirm my business trip.
>> Therefore, I would be grateful if you help me arrange my business trip.
There is no big thing to do. You can just confirm my business trip.
>> I am  humbly asking for your permission to grant me this 6-month work assignment while I do my regular reports at our own head quarters.

If you have any further question, please don¡¯t hesitate call me.
I very much look forward your pr
ompt reply.
>> If you have any further question, please don¡¯t hesitate to call me.
I very much look forward to your prompt reply.

respectfully,
>> Respectfully, 

Kiseok Lee.
>> Kiseok Lee
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