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The disadvantages of having your own car

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2021-01-17 382

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Many people have their own cars. It's because your life becomes far more comfortable if you have your car. However, you cannot avoid some disadvantages because of your car.
First, driving increases the possibility of accidents. Although many people think that an airplane is more dangerous than a car, the truth is the opposite.
Second, having your car harms the environment. The car emits harmful gases like CO and SO2. Using transportation instead of driving your car is the way to protect the environment.
Third, having your car makes you spend a lot of money. You should buy a car and pay for fuel. You also have to pay additional taxes because you have your own car.
Before you buy your car, don't forget to consider those disadvantages!

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You nailed it, Mina! You've definitely mentioned those disadvantages that may affect someone's lifestyle! Good job! -Faith-
Many people have their own cars. It's because your life becomes far more comfortable if you have your car. 
>> Many people have their own cars because life becomes far more comfortable if you have one. 
However, you cannot avoid some disadvantages because of your car.
>> CORRECT
First, driving increases the possibility of accidents. 
>> CORRECT
Although many people think that an airplane is more dangerous than a car, the truth is the opposite.
>> Many people think that airplanes are more dangerous than cars,  but it is the complete opposite.
Second, having your car harms the environment. 
>> CORRECT
OR: Having more cars can cause air pollution.
The car emits harmful gases like CO and SO2.
>> Cars emit harmful gases like CO and SO2.
Using transportation instead of driving your car is the way to protect the environment.
>> CORRECT
Third, having your car makes you spend a lot of money. 
>> CORRECT
OR: It has high maintenance so you tend to spend too much.
You should buy a car and pay for fuel. 
>> When you buy a car you should pay for fuel. 
You also have to pay additional taxes because you have your own car.
>> You also have to pay additional taxes for having it.
Before you buy your car, don't forget to consider those disadvantages!
>> Before buying one, don't forget to consider those disadvantages!

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