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Todays, Cases of child abuse is increasing constantly.

A few days ago, I saw a case of 'Jung-in' on the news.

She was adoptee.

Her foster patrnts adopted her for show.

They were good parents with other people.

But, For the rest, they starved her and treated badly

'Jung-in'died in 16 months after adoption.

Many people was angry at her dead.

So our goverment is investigating how to prevent child abuse.

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Hello, Chris.
This is really a sad news~
Thank you for sharing this~
Have a good weekend!

- T. Rina


1. Todays, Cases of child abuse is increasing constantly.
>> These days, cases of child abuse are increasing constantly.

2. A few days ago, I saw a case of 'Jung-in' on the news.
>> A few days ago, I saw the case of "Jung-in" on the news.

3. She was adoptee.
>> She was adopted.

4. Her foster patrnts adopted her for show.
>> Her foster parents adopted her for show.

5. They were good parents with other people.
>> They were good parents with their other kids.

6. But, For the rest, they starved her and treated badly
>> But, they starved and treated Jung-in badly.

7. 'Jung-in'died in 16 months after adoption.
>> Jung-in died 16 months after the adoption. 

8. Many people was angry at her dead.
>> Many people were angry for her death.

9. So our goverment is investigating how to prevent child abuse.
>> So our government is investigating how to prevent child abuse.
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