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All subjects are worth learning but I don't know if people have to learn subjects which are not interested in. Classic music is well known as making people calm, relaxed and happy. However, most people prefer to listen to pop music because it is more rhythmical than classic music. People also want to enjoy watching hansom guys or beautiful girls on TV but people don't want to see classic music programs and don't have any feeling when they meet musical players. Even though, classic music has positive effect to people I don't why we have to learn it. I think it is better learning something if somebody is interested in specific area. I don't even know what kind of positive effect classic music has. So I would like to say that it is important music but everybody don't have to learn it.

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All subjects are worth learning but I don't know if people have to learn subjects which are not interested in. 
>>> All subjects are worth learning but I don't know if people have to learn subjects which they're not interested in. 
Classic music is well known as making people calm, relaxed and happy.
>>> CORRECT
 However, most people prefer to listen to pop music because it is more rhythmical than classic music.
>>> CORRECT
 People also want to enjoy watching hansom guys or beautiful girls on TV but people don't want to see classic music programs and don't have any feeling when they meet musical players. 
 >>> People also want to enjoy watching handsome guys or beautiful girls on TV but people don't want to see classic music programs and don't have any feeling when they meet musical players. 
Even though, classic music has positive effect to people I don't why we have to learn it.
>>> Even though, classic music has positive effect to people I don't know why we have to learn it.
 I think it is better learning something if somebody is interested in specific area. 
>>> I think it is better to learn other things if somebody is interested in specific area. 
I don't even know what kind of positive effect classic music has.
>>> CORRECT
So I would like to say that it is important music but everybody don't have to learn it.
>>> So I would like to say that music is important but everybody doesn't have to learn it.
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