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What are the positive and negative ways some people choose to deal with stress?

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17 years ago, I was a new employee. At that time, I often made mistakes. It made me crazy. When I got stress out, I drank a lot. I couldn't remind that how I drank and What did I say. But, Resources of stress didn't solve. The next day I had to do something for solving problems, but I couldn't do my best. Because of hangover. Drinking a lot isn't a good way to deal with stress. I think it is the worst way. Sleeping a lot, eating a lot are better than drinking a lot. Those ways are negative ways which people choose to deal with stress. Doing exercise, going on a vacation, leaning for solving problems are positive ways. When I get stress, I should prepare to solve resources of stress.

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  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

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What are the positive and negative ways some people choose to deal with stress?

17 years ago, I was a new employee. At that time, I often made mistakes. It made me crazy. 
>>> CORRECT 

When I got stress out, I drank a lot. I couldn't remind that how I drank and What did I say. 
>>> When I got stressed out, I drank a lot. I couldn't remember how I drank and what did I say. 

But, Resources of stress didn't solve. The next day I had to do something for solving problems, but I couldn't do my best. Because of hangover. 
>>> But, drinking didn't solve my problem. The next day I had to do something to solve my problems, but I couldn't do my best because of hangover. 

Drinking a lot isn't a good way to deal with stress. I think it is the worst way. 
>>> CORRECT 

Sleeping a lot, eating a lot are better than drinking a lot. 
>>> Sleeping a lot, eating is better than drinking a lot. 

Those ways are negative ways which people choose to deal with stress. 
>>> Those are the negative ways in which people choose to deal with stress. 

Doing exercise, going on a vacation, leaning for solving problems are positive ways. 
>>> Doing an exercise, going on a vacation, learning to solve problems are the positive ways. 

When I get stress, I should prepare to solve resources of stress.
>>> When I get stress, I should prepare to solve the sources of my stress.
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