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If I can have one thing forever I would like to live with my familiy forever. I can¡¯t imagine my life without my family. Sometimes when I thought that I don¡¯t have anyone beside me, I feel so sad and I¡¯m afraid with it. But I know that there¡¯s nothing lasts forever. So I will cherish the memory of my family.

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Hi Heidi! We all have something that we need all the time. Sometimes, it has a sentimental value to us that's why it's hard to let go. And there are some that are just very useful to us. Either way, we can't live without it because of the importance. It teaches us how to value things very much. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I can have one thing forever I would like to live with my familiy forever. 
>> If I can have one thing forever, it would be living with my family forever. 

I can¡¯t imagine my life without my family. 
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Sometimes when I thought that I don¡¯t have anyone beside me, I feel so sad and I¡¯m afraid with it. 
>> Sometimes when I think that I don¡¯t have anyone beside me, I feel so sad and afraid. 

But I know that there¡¯s nothing lasts forever. 
>> But I know nothing lasts forever. 

So I will cherish the memory of my family.
>> So I will cherish all my memories with my family. 

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