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HOMEWORK: Which part of your childhood do you wish you could change?

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2025-07-31 3

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When I younger periods, I had have to live in ill-harmonious vibes.
I had almost always been feeling so gloomy.
I had crying many times, and I wanted to get out from my parents.
But, I think that I should have studied more enthusiastic that period.
If I would have studied more well, I could have been living better now.

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Good day, Joyce!
Thank you for sharing this!
Not all people are born with a silver spoon; however, our past molded us to become better people. Fighting!
Aki~

When I younger periods, I had have to live in ill-harmonious vibes.
>>>  When I was younger, I lived in an ill-harmonious vibe.

I had almost always been feeling so gloomy.
>>> CORRECT!

I had crying many times, and I wanted to get out from my parents.
>>> I cried many times, and I wanted to get out of my parents' house.

But, I think that I should have studied more enthusiastic that period.
>>> But, I think that I should have studied more enthusiastically during that period.

If I would have studied more well, I could have been living better now.
>>> If I had studied better, I could have been living better now.

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